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Worthy of Additional
Commentary
the coin
has been rubbed smooth
double-headed luck
#73 Trish Shields,
Canada
I liked this one for the
idea of the person not knowing which side was which. It is like
becoming one. A tactile sense.
morning Greyhound
the sun rises --
her tattoo peeks over her waistband
What's lucky about this
you ask? Well, the observation made me feel damn lucky.
Observing and writing has it's privileges.
#69. Mike Kleiza, Canada
This one gave me a
chuckle. I would like to see the last line shortened.
Unless.....she has a large waistband and that is a clever way of
showing it. smile. Allso, if this is a bus, then one expects the
sun to rise over the windshield so it was a nice subliminal feel
to it.
still
on the battlefield--
a soldier's runes
# 63. Deborah P. Kolodji,
US
I like this one also,
reminding me of the old celtic ways the historical battles, of
course continuing on till today. Plus the idea of lost and
found...one may be lost but then a memory is found, very nice.
green bells bloom
among weeds—my neighbors
forgive me
it is customary to give
a 'green bouquet' for good luck on St. Patrick's day, not to
mention, it's lucky my neighbors forgive me for not pulling
weeds . . . love. Give the luck of the Irish to someone special
by giving them green flowers in March.
# 56. an'ya, US
This one is endearing because I have been there.....in fact our
mower is being fixed now.
I love the contrast, of weeds and and the green bells. And I
like the word green bells. In my mind ...green is something
new...like a green horse, etc...and bells, a sound juxtaposed
where there is no sound. It is also rather festive for St
Patrick's day; one can imagine the snakes among the weeds /or
the bells of the air and the snakes on the ground.
lunar eclipse
the ying yang
of good fortune
# 53. Trish Shields,
Canada
I
enjoy this one because of the give and take of yin and yang, and
the workings of it. It just happens.
under which ice surface
do you wait?
humble loon
*On June 30th 1987 this
coin, "the loonie", replaced the one dollar banknote. In the
2002 Winter Olympics the loonie became infamous and lucky.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Loonie
# 44. Terra Martin,
Canada
I enjoyed this, one ,
plus a bit of info I did not know. I love this as a
horizontal haiku ...under which icy surface do you wait /humble
loon ?
kissing the baby's hand
my lips brush against
the jet bracelet
I don't know if this is
international, or specific to T&T but; In T&Ta jet bracelet
linked in gold is placed on the baby's wrist to ward
off negative forces.
# 43. Gillena Cox,
Trinidad
another one I found
interesting, although the small beads would worry me, it is
interesting the use of black and gold ....I can see the beauty
of it.
clink of cutlery
*blackeyed peas and rice
New Years Day
* For Trinidad and
Tobagonians, blackeyed peas and rice cooked together called a 'blackeye
peas and rice cookup' is thought to bring good luck in the
coming year.
# 33. Gillena Cox,
Trinidad
light
casting a rainbow
beyond the tears
# 30. Judith Gorgone, US
Very nice Judy ! I might
like an em dash after rainbow....to give that extra aha..and
break the sentence, but it is omo ...
bowed head
curled bamboo stalks tied
with red ribbon
* actual plant name is
"lucky bamboo" the Chinese word for prayer and bamboo sound
alike. This plant is considered to be lucky in Feng Sheui, the
Chinese practice of the placement of objects in a space to
create harmony.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Feng_Shui
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dracaena_sanderiana
# 28. Terra Martin,
Canada
what a beautiful haiku,
a peacefulness exudes from it. I have seen the curled bamboos,
very nice.
street racing Mom's car
St. Christopher
slides sideways
#23. Rich Magahiz, US
I Have seen this happen!
young couple
coined dough
on the door of dreams
# 15. Rita Odeh, Israel
I pick this one for the
symbolism . It is so good imo. I might put it
young couple
coined dough on the door
of dreams
his leather jacket
proclaims him a Cobra
snake earrings at church
# 14.
Trish Shields, CA
This is another symbokic
haiku. Just the word 'his' at the beginning says a lot ....the
snake earings in church.
I'd kissed the
stone...
the barman pours me
a Guinness
# 12. Rich Magahiz, US
At this point, I need a
drink myself so this works well for me! I just like it.
broken mirra.....
seven years
creating separate reflections
# 10. shanna Hawaii, US
I Like this one also , I
would take out the word creating.
all-seeing eye
the barn owl stalks
it's prey
#09. Terra Martin, CA
This is good also. I
would just take out the word eye...all seeing says it ....
family picnic
pitching horseshoes
he rings one
# 03. Betty Kaplan, US
There is something about
this one and the words, "he rings one"...that works perfectly
with the family picnic, maybe the words
"ring"....."family"....very nice.
in the meadow
emperor tulips bloom--
a three leaf clover
# 01. john daleiden, US
I love this one. I like
the idea of the royalty symbolized in the Emperor Tuip and the
commoner in the three leaf clover. Nice.
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