Conducted by Gillena Cox, TT
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FIRST PLACE
season of lent-
my shadow
thinner and thinner
--
Jacek Margolak; POLAND
Points:
20
Comments:
1.
I
liked using their shadow instead of a mirror to observe the
fasting but not sure if there was any other significants to
it. In my region a thin shadow can imply a long shadow and
winter but I don't believe that's the same for Caribbean
kigo.
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2.
I try also to make thinner my shadow. Although I try, my
belly is still bulging in profile on the wall. But fasting
is not for physical but spiritual reasons. Let our souls to
be merry!
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3. Here is really the spirit of Lent
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SECOND PLACE
the ash cross
smudged on his sleeve
season of Lent
--Michael Baribeau
Points:
16
Comments:
I'd cut 'season of’
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THIRD PLACE
last day of lent -- - -
so many spring blossoms
waiting to open
--Karina Klesko
Points:
13
Comments:1.
This
is also a beautiful haiku. There is enough balance between
sad and joy. I like it very much.
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2. This poem contains a good
balance between the sobriety of lent and joy to live.
*15 THIRD PLACE
lent-
in the
wayside chapel
kneel
the prostitutes
--Andrzej Dembończyk
Points:
13
Comments:
The Lent is a good ocasion to pray for ask for
forgiveness.Even for prostitutes.
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2. I'd
reorder the lines to - in the wayside chapel/prostitutes
kneel/lent
RESULTS CONTINUES
1.
payday friday night
too many dollars lent
fish chowder all gone
--Joseph B. Connolly
Points:
2
Comments:
2.
四旬祭遠きカリブを偲びをり
sizyun-sai touki karibu wo sinobi wori
lent festival
it reminds me
Caribbean
far away
--sakuo
Points:
0
Comments:
3.
oko ponoci
zvono zove na pasticadu
prije Pepelnice
around midnight
a bellfry calls for pasticada
before Lent
--Tomislav Maretic
*** pasticada - the last grassy meal
before Lent
Points:
1
Comments:
My
knowledge of Lent is limited but I liked thinking this a
good natured poke at the Fat Tuesday 'preperations' before
lent with a Pavlovian responce to the church bells.
4.
first day of lent
an upside-down squirrel
hangs onto the birdfeeder
--cindy
Points:
7
Comments:
6.
songs from carnival
are chased away by ashes
Lent has arrived.
-- Catbird; Corbelle Armando
Points:
1
Comments:
I
liked this for it's metaphor a poetic sense but for the same
reason felt it was a little too much tell and not enough
show in a haiku for my tastes.
7.
peacock eyes
under the lenten moon-
grass and grubs
--an'ya
http://www.moonset-newspaper.com
Points:
5
Comments:
I
thought this poetic and an interesting moonlit image. For
me it symbolized spring but seemed contrary to Lent
traditions of fasting but not sure what the caribbean
'spring' interp would be. I was confused also because I
didn't think peacocks were nocturnal. Maybe it was the eye
patterns of their feathers?
8
After the Lent
all around the church
shells of red eggs
--Vasile Moldovan
Points:
12
Comments:1.
For me personally, being Eastern Orthodox, this is a
familiar moment. I can just see the red shells all cracked
open! Perhaps in line one "the" isn't necessary, just
"after Lent" instead would be enough.
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2.This haiku has a very good contrast
between Lent and red eggs, between Lent and Fest, sad and
joy.
9.
Lent came to an end...
the blades of grass are rising
among the ruins too
-- Constantin STROE
Points:
8
Comments:1.
a bit lengthy possibly due to translation, the
juxtaposition in this one is very good. For line one, maybe
just "end of Lent" and for line two, removing "the" . . .
end of Lent—
blades of grass are rising
among the ruins too
or
Lent's end—
grass blades are rising
among the ruins too
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2. Nice symbol of spring after Lent
and Easter's risen Lord. I assume the symbolism still works
in the Caribbean even without the spring kigo.
11.
after the bacchanal...
lenten resolutions
for forty days
--Keith A. Simmonds; T & T
Points:
0
12.
in the desert
temptation all around--
lent
--tori inu; JAPAN
Points:1
Comments:
Like
the irony.
13.
Lent begins –
old stones in a shoe
gnaw at her sole
--Mary Davila
Points:
4
Comments:
Another Lent tradition I'm not familier with but I
understand the purpose and you gotta like the pun:) I would
say 'her' shoe instead of 'a' shoe.
14.
Lent --
the cross is not yet
veiled
--Angelika Wienert
Points:
4
Comments:
I'd cut the 'is'
16.
discussing lent
he has a third biscuit -
mother superior smiles
--John
Points:
3
17
cobwebs sway
where the mistletoe hung...
lent begins
--Ed Markowski
Points:
9
Comments:
Nicely implies the tradition of spring cleaning for Lent and
going from the pantry plenty of a mistletoe Christmas to the
empty cobwebs of fasting for Lent.
18.
Question what is lent
Stuff swept from under beds
Answered Josh age 6
--Gynith
Note:
This is
a true story. At children's church on Easter when my
grandson Joshua was 6 the minister asked if anyone knew what
lent was. Joshua's hand shot up: "I know, I know" he
answered. At age 6 he knew just about everyting. "It's
that stuff you sweep from under the bed." The minister
could not keep a straight face and the congregation burst
into laughter. Josh is now 22 and still knows everything.
Points:
0
20.
unlit candle
the Lent Sacrifice box
empty
--Richard Krawiec
Points:
3
21.
be it borrowed, be it lent,
your
pound of flesh
at
stake
--Norman Darlington, Bunclody, Ireland
Points:
2
22.
the great harmonies...
Lent opens
with a dead language
--Daniel W. Schwerin Minister; First
United Methodist Church; 121 Wisconsin Ave
Points:
5
Commens:
I believe that poem # 22 is a senryu , not a haiku. But
really it is a good senryu.
