Emotions,
Feelings, and Insights . . .
Hello,
These haiku are really very good. It was gratifying to
read them all. What I found interesting in particular is
the feeling and the 'aha' that most of the haiku had.
For instance this one:
Heart Day...
the sun casts intensely
on faceless partners
# 20. Willie R. Bongcaron, PH
At first you read it one
way, then suddenly when you read it again...and it reads
differently. This verse uses both the micro and macro
world around us. At first I saw it as self. The poet was
reconnecting with the past... Then when rereading it
again, line 2 became the focus. The sun casts intensely—then
the line 3 upon faceless partners. It could be outward
watching couples walking in a courtyard, their faces
obscured by the angle of the sun.
Another haiku appealed to
the visual:
almost spring
the sun streams in through the door—
Valentine's Day
# 41. Manu Kant, IN
Immediately you find
yourself counting syllables in line 2. But then you
realize it is a stream of words across the page.
Love Day...
a lady in red awaits
her blind date
# 14. Willie R. Bongcaron, PH
At one time I may have
overlooked this very simple haiku as ordinary. But
because of my own problems with vision, after I read
over this the first time, I went on; however, upon
reading it a second time, the thought came to me, if the
person was blind what difference did it make to include
the color of her dress. So for me, blind date carried
another meaning entirely. So the aha in this was a
surprise to me. BTW, I see I have picked the same poet.
But when I read these I do not see the names.
Valentine’s Day
he’s getting too old
for Viagra
# 63. Patricia Carragon, US
Patricia, I found this a
humorous senyru. I laughed out loud, realizing what
truth is in that verse!
valentine's day
we slow our pace
around the pond
# 40. Cindy Tebo, US
This is a nice steady
haiku, as the days fly by one after another, Valentine's
Day fits into the routine but at a little bit slower
pace, sort of slowing down to take measure of the
circle, of life.
valentine's day—
the zoo chimpanzees
groom each other
# 04. an'ya, US
This also made me laugh
as we all probably have taken notice in fascination and
even awe at how public Valentine's Day can be. This is
beautifully written with sounds of the zee's the double
o's. In its certain humor it is profound at the same
time, expressing timeless caring as it takes the
chimpanzees time and patience to groom each other all
day long.
another
Valentine's Day card
from my insurance agent
# 21. Ed Baker, US
Ed, what can I say that
you haven't said?
I see so many emotions
and feelings in each haiku that give so much insight...
Another one...
Valentine’s Day
wearing black
instead of red
# 47. Patricia Carragon
This reminds me of the
Widows of
Joe Cain and Mardi Gras.
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These additional haiku
are also excellent examples expressing emotions,
feelings, and insights:
Valentine's Day
if I've grown old and grey
he notices not
# 06. Audrey Downey, US
our on-line
affair
zapped
by a storm
# 08. Barbara A. Taylor, AU
Valentine's Day...
two old lovers look into
each other's eyes
# 13. Keith A. Simmonds, TT
valentine’s day
once a year
speeding hearts
# 09. Bernard Gieske, US
inside her card
this year's
child support notice
# 36. Ed Baker, US
valentine’s
day
a cardboard heart
sings of love
# 39. Bernard Gieske, US
Valentine’s Day
no roses
on her desk
# 45. Patricia Carragon, US
february
fourteenth—
fresh roses on the grave
of a young girl
# 46. Andrzej Dembończyk, PL
Valentine’s
Day
there are more frogs
than princes
# 51. Patricia Carragon, US
longing
for true love
without roses and chocolate...
Valentine's Day
# 58. Keith A. Simmonds, TT
Valentine’s day
the untrodden snow
around the mailbox
# 83. Bouwe Brower, NL
traffic
jam
thinking of
an old girlfriend
#85. Bouwe Brower, NL
Thank you all for your
participation in this Happy Valentine/Love Themed Issue
of Sketchbook.
Karina Klesko,
Sketchbook Editor
