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Editor's Choice: Karina Klesko, US
 

 

 

 

from the October 2008 Haiku Thread

 

after the night
in the jack-o'-lantern
wingless moths

# 09. Jacek Margolak, PL

An eerie sense of Halloween.

 

turn off all the light
eat entire bag of Snickers
write another stupid poem

# 18. Ed Baker, US

ha, ha, ha ...Ed that is funny ......

 

soft rain—
my cat chases
a wool ball

# 22. Jacek Margolak, PL

I like very much the feeling and the picture that one imagines....

 

two dark shadows
dancing wildly
under a willow tree

# 60. Keith A. Simmonds, TT

...a good autumn image.

 

unnamed grave
a stone angel's shadow
and a few leaves

# 23. Jacek Margolak, PL

This one casts many layers of thought, and contemplation, as well as a visual image.

I envisioned it this way too.

 

homecoming—
an old cat sleeps
on my son's lap

# 27. Jacek Margolak, PL

I like the past, present and future incorporated in this haiku.

 

cloudy night—
the only star
on a witch's wand

# 28. Jacek Margolak, PL

This is darling ...I read this to my little girl .....it is a haiku of wonder...a real 'aha'

 

moon shine
candle shadows do not fade
in the wind

# 38. Iga Gala-Miemus, IL

I found this imagery fascinating. The round moon, and the round pumpkins in moonlight...long lost the fire within, yet still have the moon shine/glow

 

small hours—
a pregnant tabby cold-noses me
at the lonely taxi rank

# 39. Alan Summers, UK

I like the feeling this gives through imagery.
A pregnant cat, carrying the life...inside...while on the outside...the lonely cab stand...that during the day or working hours transports people form one place to another...as the mother transporting the birth of the kittens to this world.

Very nice.

 

gonna' bake
a pumpkin pie with a heart
in the middle

# 41. Betty Kaplan, US

This is very sweet and home spun...the heart...a metaphor...or recipe of love.

 

noodle bar
a wolf's moon swings
to a side street breeze

# 46. Alan Summers, UK

I can picture the noodle swinging in the breeze as he crosses his eyes to zone in on it...

the moon may even appear to double...!

 

re-lacing the shoe
mud from yesterday's grave site
on his sole

# 48. Alan Summers, UK

There is definitely something about this haiku...perhaps the term wabi ...could be used...

the re-lacing...is so key to this as a whole...I know the word sole...also projects...but I am not sure that is even needed as a projection for the word soul...

 

Divine Service—
the shadow of a candle
trembling through the icons

# 49. Vasile Moldovan, RO

Hi Vasile,

I have seen this and it is ominous...it is probably the source for the spirit-like feel one has when attending church...

 

Heat scorching
the butterfly shadow enters
in a tree shadow

# 57. Vasile Moldovan, RO

Another one that is right there in front of us...but I never gave it a lot of thought...

it is almost like Alice in Wonderland...an alternative world, an alter ego.

Really fascinating..
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lightning flashing
and thunder rolling

a hut in shadows

# 58. Keith A. Simmonds, TT

Hi Keith, I tweaked this a bit...not much...as I have liked your haiku

a nice metaphor of life as well....

 

her satin skin
the jack-o'-lantern flickers...
flickers... goes out

# 81. Rafal Zabratynski, PL

Very sensuous and textured.

 

a flurry of bats
across the gibbous moon
evening hush

# 73. Catherine J.S. Lee

We must have bats on Hallowed Eve!!!

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